Bringing something new to the table is something I harp on a lot of Triggerstreet scripts for. They’re well written, they just don’t do anything new or exciting with the genre they are in. The Chinese Chicken Fish certainly brought something to the table, but it is an acquired taste.

Title Reviewed: The Chinese Chicken Fish
Reviewed by: Russell Corey

This is a short skit that looks like it was done in a high school auditorium. the music is well timed and the strongest aspectof the short. Camera shot angles were limited but well taken, my favorite shot is the zoom up on the prince's face near the end.

Title Reviewed: Oh, My Fair Rapunzel
Reviewed by: tonystags

This is a short skit that looks like it was done in a high school auditorium. the music is well timed and the strongest aspectof the short. Camera shot angles were limited but well taken, my favorite shot is the zoom up on the prince's face near the end.

Title Reviewed: Oh, My Fair Rapunzel
Reviewed by: tonystags

Miracle$ is an interesting concept for a story. I liked the idea of it a lot. The concept is that the Catholic Church sees fabricated miracles as a method for keeping themselves relevant in modern society.

Title Reviewed: Miracle$
Reviewed by: A Messenger

I often wonder what studios are thinking when they make films - a disney cartoon about teenagers in love, etc. And I kept asking myself while reading this screenplay - what type of person would want to plunk down money and get into this movie? I'm not sure - it would obviously warrant an R rating; the people who identify with the family who loses the child isn't going to enjoy the violent club dramas; the people who go for the violence aren't going to care about the touchy-feely marriage dissolving/loss of progeny plot. The two plots seem too far apart for one audience.

Title Reviewed: Unmasked
Reviewed by: KikiH1

I like that there are so many vivid details in the story. With even just the mention of one or two little details, you are bringing the whole picture to life. There is a stream-of-consciousness tone to the story, which brings in an interesting point.

Title Reviewed: Day Trip To Wigan
Reviewed by: Terri84

The thing that kept me from really enjoying the narrative was the lack of subtext and the forced dialogue. I like what was shown in terms of the caves and other locations, but I wasn’t “shown” enough in terms of inter-character relationships. The Roger-Scooter conflict would’ve been more powerful if it was show through action rather than those little spot conversations (i.e., “You still blame [Roger] for Michael’s death…” and so on).

Title Reviewed: The Night Country (Rev.)
Reviewed by: adamthegreat

This script is really great and really well written. It’s obvious that you put a lot of hard work into this and it’s definitely appreciated. I’m a fan of the sci-fi genre and it’s not very often you find one that is well written with a good concept but this meets all my demands as a fan and even exceeds it.

Title Reviewed: Love, Sex, & Death in the 21st Century
Reviewed by: bajillion

Between the depths of a treacherous, unexplored cave and the Arch of Heaven exist all kinds of life and death. In Plato's classic tale man emerges from the misconceptions and illusions of the cave, which keep him enslaved. He walks in the light, becomes ennobled and descends into the cave again to serve his fellow cavemen by enlightening them.

Title Reviewed: The Night Country (Rev.)
Reviewed by: Bus-TAH!

THE CONCEPT The title is a little misleading. I thought the script was going to be about a kid whose FATHER had ADD.

Title Reviewed: My A.D.D. Dad (REV)
Reviewed by: Evan.Georgiades

The story was engaging and little kids would easily be able to follow. This would make a great live-action piece, but at the same time I think this story would do well as an animated movie. The story was original and the characters, believable.

Title Reviewed: The End of the Rainbow
Reviewed by: T. Anthony

What a pleasant if , I may suggest almost poetical story . Your desciptive power is up to scratch and I was reminded of Stephen King's " Stand by me " . That was more fully developed and , I'm afraid for Mr. King more boring from it . Here you have transcended from poetry to prose but I regret , the end product is a bit lacking in substance beyond small town life and the hint of scandal . Concept - Save basing this work on War and Peace , this is a pictorial story told in great detail which , by the end of the chapter , would have amiably ambled almost as far as Highway 50 . I can really see its value to teenage students of literature as a model piece of descriptive writing on small town American life in the fifties . Character - Save when the children encouter the alien car and some emotion is described , the characters seem to lack the emotion that would make them more interesting . I appreciate the humor of the mountain names but this is given not invented by the main character . Dialogue - Functional for its purpose but not very expressive . Story - Mundane but very descriptive and the more I think about it , subtly so , has no catch save the trousers incident . Structure - Lacks any form of closure and appears as a narrative poem . Overall - Readable but unspectacular . The small town life is too unemotionally described for me One typo spotted - P.7 - "Only too " not "only to " ; top line . I like your style but it misses a hidden depth in this story . Simon

Title Reviewed: THE OLD ROAD
Reviewed by: Simon_Radford

Lookie what I got assigned. What’s the odds of that random assignment generator eh? Be interesting to see how this revision reads – I don’t tend to look back on what was read & reviewed then, because this is now.

Title Reviewed: HAWAIIANSTEIN (rev 2)
Reviewed by: jwest

The short by bhubbard "The Problem of Perfectionism" is a really short and really detailed film. The characters acted on cue, which is hard to find. A comedy, but a little on the thriller-action kind is special due to the lead actor who needs a story (A narrative) and here comes narrative and kills him on the spot and then from the dream kills his friend who downs him for having a quote on quote stupid dream.

Title Reviewed: The Problem of Perfectionism
Reviewed by: lavel

The part of this story that I enjoyed the most was the ending. Now, I don't mean that like it probably sounds. I liked the idea of Jack being Stonejelly, it gave the bookending device used a nice payoff.

Title Reviewed: Universal Escapade
Reviewed by: Doree

You’ve already got a pretty unique twist on top of an old idea. But, why not make the characters just as unique? Mr. Erasmus is the same big tough mob boss, Hiram is the slimy-rat character, and Jimmy is the strange second man. Not that big of a deal, because one can expect to see characters we’ve seen before in movies, but just something to think about.

Title Reviewed: The Christmas Contract
Reviewed by: T. Anthony

Not much bad to write about this dramedy (hope that's what this was). I thought the script was well written. Good dialogue.

Title Reviewed: Executive Mustache
Reviewed by: btpalmer

You are a pro at screen writing, that much is clear. You have a quick style for setting up scenes and no nonsense way of depicting the action. It is always very clear what is going on and this talent comes in quite handy at the climactic shoot out scene.

Title Reviewed: HOPE AND FEAR
Reviewed by: harkins99

One of the last great film noir movies, that wasn’t done as parody, was the George Stevens classic A PLACE IN THE SUN. That was the second time Theodore Driesser’s novel, AN AMERICAN TRAGEDY had been adapted by Hollywood. In lieu of film noir, the fashion of gritty “hyper-realism” has been effectively used in fact-based movies like BLACK HAWK DOWN.

Title Reviewed: Yesterday's Tomorrow (revised)
Reviewed by: bloodmeridian2004

First and foremost, let me say that this screenplay shows a lot of unique creativity. The twists and turns throughout the story are exciting and kept me interested enough to finish in one sitting. With that said, here are a few suggestions that will hopefully help you in future drafts.

Title Reviewed: Book Cover
Reviewed by: jkincell