Aloha! Thanks a shit ton for the review. You have definitely nailed all of the flaws that I keep running into with this script and your comments and suggestions are both valid and helpful. I really appreciate you spending your own free time reviewing my script. I realize exactly how much that free time is worth.

Thanks again and cheers!

Mike

Hey, thanks for taking the time to read and review Sheepdogs. I appreciate it.
Jordan

This is from Hitchcock by Francois Truffaut [originally found this on Mystery Man on Film's old blog]

“In many of the films now being made, there is very little cinema: they are mostly what I call ‘photographs of people talking.’ When we tell a story in cinema, we should resort to dialog only when it’s impossible to do otherwise. I always try to tell a story in the cinematic way, through a succession of shots and bits of film in between.

“It seems unfortunate, that with the arrival of sound, the motion picture, overnight, assumed a theatrical form. The mobility of the camera doesn’t alter this fact. Even though the camera may move along the sidewalk, it’s still theatre.

“One result of this is the loss of cinematic style, and another is the loss of fantasy. In writing a screenplay, it is essential to separate clearly the dialog from the visual elements and, whenever possible, to rely more on the visual than on the dialog. Whichever way you choose to stage the action, your main concern is to hold the audience’s fullest attention.

“Summing it up, one might say that the screen rectangle must be charged with emotion.”